Love and Hope Reflection

After a long time spending time both in class and at home, my essay is about to done and it is getting better. Now, I have done written about how the character changes from both the book and the movie. I am going to write a comparison between them as they have really similar conditions. As long as we did a lot of paper "workshops" in class, we discussed how we can improve our essay. I learned that, a thesis should be argumentative and analytical. For example, my thesis is that "love is  like the hope, it always saves and helps people." This is my argument and my topic of my paragraph. It is argumentative but it's not specific as I did not explain it. So I mentioned how love had change some one from ... to ... in both the novel and the movie which helped to make my thesis clear and specific.
Besides that, my body paragraph used to be full of  the summary about the story and the movie. As I read that, I felt boring because I already knew what happen in it. After learning that how to improved the body paragraph, I used quotes instead of summarizing what happened in the story and I explained each of them. I deleted some summary which was not related to my topic, and I added more analysis about how the characters was change, what they used to be before they changed, and what are they after they changed. Analysis is the most difficult part for me. Sometimes, when I was explaining one quotes, I felt like I was kept repeating the same point, and had no idea about how to make it specific sometimes.  For example this quote: “[he] felt something [he]’d never felt before, [he] felt alive. And yet [he] knew that beyond the door the world was waiting for [him], and [he] would be able to take others like [he] was one of them”(Ammaniti 143). I spent a long time revising the analysis of this quotes. I explained what did alive mean in this quotes and why Lorenzo never felt that before and why he felt that now. but I think I could explained more but I really have no idea. If I explained more, I felt like I would keep repeating that how Lorenzo was changed from this to this because of Olivia. Analysis is my weakness and I need to spend more time working on it.  Also, a topic and ending sentence which shows the point of the paragraph is very important, so that it was clear and well organized. In the topic sentence, I showed that how love have changed people and give them hope such as "In the story “Me and You”, the time staying with Olivia caused Lorenzo to change from being selfish and antisocial to caring". As I learned from Ms.Guarino, something cause something happen could make the topic sentence more stronger, now I am able to write a good topic sentence. The ending sentence is similar and I made it related to my topic Love and Hope.
At last, I think I still need to finish my story first, as I haven't done the comparison paragraph and the conclusion. Then, I need to checked over my body paragraph to make it more analytical.