2016年5月24日星期二
I am Sorry(Edit)
Jerry Wu
Ms.Guarino
English II
May.27.2016
I am Sorry
“Sometimes, I wonder what my world will be like, if I didn’t have someone like you in my life.”(Rebecca). Love is the most common emotion that people have. People always have someone which he likes and falls in love with. However, love is painful, and people always make mistakes. Even couples would have argument with each others. Sometimes people even hurt each other even it is the person he loved. The poem “I am Sorry” by Rebecca H. uses the rhyme couplets as structure to tell the boy which the speaker loved about her feeling of apologize and how much she wants to fall in love forever with him.
The poem is very simple, it has only 12 lines with 6 stanzas. It does not include any complex vocabulary so it looked easy for the audience to understand and remember. It use rhyme couplets which have two successive rhyming lines in a verse and has the same meter to form a complete thought(literarydevices.net). Besides that, couplets sometimes represent couples in poetry. In this poem, the speaker wrote about the love between a couple which is herself and her boyfriend. Overall the poem, we can infer that the speaker used to have a boyfriend and now they broke up because some problems happen between them. The speaker wondered what her life will be without her boyfriend, and she figure out that she really loves him and she wants to stay with him. So in the poem, she used rhyme couplets for each of the stanza and connect the two lines in one stanza. All the stanzas have the words “I” and “you”, so it’s clear that the whole poem is about the relationship between two people.
In the first stanza, the speaker wondered what her life will be if her boyfriend wasn’t with her. “Sometimes I wonder what my world will be like, If i didn’t have someone like you in my life.” This gives the audience the information that the story is about the love between the speaker and the guy she like. And from the title “I am sorry”, we can clarify that the poem is about the apologize in love. Then in the second stanza, she found out that she can’t live with out him. So she wrote that:”I came back to reality only to see, that I wouldn’t live myself without you and me.” In this stanza, the speaker got an answer from what she wondered in the first stanza. She use rhyme couplets “see” and “me” to refer to the relationship between couple and make connection with the phrase “you” and “me” in the second line.
The third and fourth stanza is like the transition in this poem which showed how much she wanted to stay with him by using the rhyme couplets “me” and “be”, “you and “through”. Those rhyme couplets refer to the relationship between “I” and “you”. “I am looking forwards to the future, hoping you will be with me. And I want to spend the rest of my life making it up to you.” After the speaker wondered her life without her boyfriend, she expressed how much she loves him in this poem. She wanted to spent the rest of her life with him. After that, the last line of the fourth line leads to the point of the poem which is apologize. She knew all the mistakes that she had made and all the hell she had been putting him through. Those two stanzas transfer the point of the poem from expressing her love into expressing her apologize.
So in the third stanza, she felt sorry and she apologized:” I am so sorry, and I can’t say that enough.” She hoped that this will be the last time they had a argument. She still loved him and she will love him forever. The rhyme couplets “enough” and “rough” show that there was enough rough between their relationship and She wanted get back with her boyfriend at the end of the poem by saying that she loved him with all her heart and she will love him forever. The last rhyme couplets “heart” and “part” retell her love and showing the point of the poem which is to recover her relationship with her boyfriend.
I chose this poem because I also have kind of similar experience as the speaker. I have a girlfriend, and we love each other. Although we have arguments all the time, we really love each other and want to stay with each other. So every time, we apologize and get back together. The poem reminds me about my girlfriend and I want send this poem to her as the poem has said: I feel sorry about all the mistakes I made to make you feel unhappy. I loved you completely and I hope you can be with me forever.
New thesis
The "I am sorry" by Rebecca H. use the rhyme caplets to communicate with the boy she loved in order to express the feeling of apologize and how much the speaker want to fall in love forever with him.
2016年5月23日星期一
Peer Review-Vivian
What she did well:
She told us the main point of the poem Mujer is about a black Persian cat. And she gave the description of the Persian cat: it is a symbol of unlucky, and people are usually afraid of them. Besides that in the introduction, she mentioned that the meaning of the poem is everyone is equal and that was the speaker want to sent to the reader. Then she gave analysis of the poem, and she defined the term of phrase in the lines. Such as "Then, they “took you for rest”. I think they just kill this “unlucky black persian cat”; it just like “that old”. In my opinion, “Yankee farm” is the heaven. Even there are “so many field mice”, the cat still feel very lonely. In the end, “you return to us” because the retribution is coming." I can see that what do the poem mean to "we took you rest to that old", people were being afraid of that Persian cat, so they killed it and covered the reason by saying it is old. Also it was an interesting interpretation that to define the Yankee farm as heaven. After that she gave more analysis to the rest of the poem and talking about the title and the deep meaning.
What she need to improve on:
Although your analysis was interesting and make sense, it is a little confusing while I was reading it. When I read through half of your paper. I felt like the point of paper is about the Persian cat, and people dislikes it so they kill it. The speaker wanted say that everything is equal and people shouldn't kill the cat because it was symbol of unlucky. However, as I was continued reading it, I soon realized the Persian cat is refer to a woman in ancient times. The title Mujer also means woman. I got confused since I can't figure out how can a woman be related to a Persian cat. I think woman wasn't a symbol of unlucky and people won't be afraid of it. Although she said that the Persian cat is a metaphor in this poem and the real meaning of that woman in the past. she didn't make enough desertion about the connection between the that woman and the Persian cat. I think that she put her description about her opinion in the second paragraph in front of giving the deeper meaning of the poem. is her thoughts right that the Yankee farm was refer to the heaven, and people killed the Persian cat and send it to heaven. So that it is more organized and more understandable. Then she can write about the deeper meaning which is woman did not choose their fate to be a woman, and woman is not treated equally as man based on the analysis she had made and proved. Also her introduction is a little bit "hollow" which started with "A weeks ago, I read a poem called Mujer." It's better to start it with a hook like something to attract reader's attention. I suggested that she can define the term "Persian Cat" at first, and tell a little bit about how people dislike it and make a relation to the poem. Then translate to the thesis. Actually, her thesis is not strong enough or she didn't really have a thesis. Her thesis can be about the equality between people, but not just saying that "I think the speaker's point was about the equality between people." Overall, there is too much I think in this paper, trying to avoid using them or you can use another phrase such as in my opinion. And the last sentence was confusing since I did not understand the meaning of it. "If you don’t do that, the retribution will come soon."
She told us the main point of the poem Mujer is about a black Persian cat. And she gave the description of the Persian cat: it is a symbol of unlucky, and people are usually afraid of them. Besides that in the introduction, she mentioned that the meaning of the poem is everyone is equal and that was the speaker want to sent to the reader. Then she gave analysis of the poem, and she defined the term of phrase in the lines. Such as "Then, they “took you for rest”. I think they just kill this “unlucky black persian cat”; it just like “that old”. In my opinion, “Yankee farm” is the heaven. Even there are “so many field mice”, the cat still feel very lonely. In the end, “you return to us” because the retribution is coming." I can see that what do the poem mean to "we took you rest to that old", people were being afraid of that Persian cat, so they killed it and covered the reason by saying it is old. Also it was an interesting interpretation that to define the Yankee farm as heaven. After that she gave more analysis to the rest of the poem and talking about the title and the deep meaning.
What she need to improve on:
Although your analysis was interesting and make sense, it is a little confusing while I was reading it. When I read through half of your paper. I felt like the point of paper is about the Persian cat, and people dislikes it so they kill it. The speaker wanted say that everything is equal and people shouldn't kill the cat because it was symbol of unlucky. However, as I was continued reading it, I soon realized the Persian cat is refer to a woman in ancient times. The title Mujer also means woman. I got confused since I can't figure out how can a woman be related to a Persian cat. I think woman wasn't a symbol of unlucky and people won't be afraid of it. Although she said that the Persian cat is a metaphor in this poem and the real meaning of that woman in the past. she didn't make enough desertion about the connection between the that woman and the Persian cat. I think that she put her description about her opinion in the second paragraph in front of giving the deeper meaning of the poem. is her thoughts right that the Yankee farm was refer to the heaven, and people killed the Persian cat and send it to heaven. So that it is more organized and more understandable. Then she can write about the deeper meaning which is woman did not choose their fate to be a woman, and woman is not treated equally as man based on the analysis she had made and proved. Also her introduction is a little bit "hollow" which started with "A weeks ago, I read a poem called Mujer." It's better to start it with a hook like something to attract reader's attention. I suggested that she can define the term "Persian Cat" at first, and tell a little bit about how people dislike it and make a relation to the poem. Then translate to the thesis. Actually, her thesis is not strong enough or she didn't really have a thesis. Her thesis can be about the equality between people, but not just saying that "I think the speaker's point was about the equality between people." Overall, there is too much I think in this paper, trying to avoid using them or you can use another phrase such as in my opinion. And the last sentence was confusing since I did not understand the meaning of it. "If you don’t do that, the retribution will come soon."
2016年5月22日星期日
Theater Review
The Last Show of this school year "Comedy Tonight"
This Friday, I went to see another show in the Black Box Theater. It was the third time and the last time I went to see the show in the Black Box in this school year. Compare to my other two experience, this show is my favorite one. The name of the Show is called "Comedy Tonight". As we can see from the name of show, the point of the show is funny and interesting. I liked comedy the best and that's why I enjoyed the show a lot during Friday night. I can say that it was the most popular show in this year, because there were full of audience in the Black Box. When I came to the Theater, there were already full of crowds and there was only a few seats left. As there were full of people inside of the theater, it was very hot inside. However, since the show was started, our attentions were taken away from the stuffiness. I want to say that, every show was interesting and the actor did a really great job putting themselves into the role. Among all this amazing show, one them wasthe most memorable. The first one is form Act one, which told a story about William An's unusual. I still remembered how his wife took his baby car so he had to ride a scooter to work. On the way, he was hitting by a dead bird and made him feel hungry and go to MacDonald to buy breakfast. He can't use his credit card and he had no cash. So he went to the bank. Then the best scene happened. The bank gave him monopoly money and kept telling him that's the real money. At last, poor and unlucky William An(I forget the name of the character he is acting) was being late for work, and his boss was angry about his magical experience so he was fired. There were also some other interesting show such as the morning meeting one and the latte boy one. All in all, if you came to see the show, I believed you enjoyed it a lot. If you did not came to see the show, that may be a regret for you. Anyway, I would like to thank all the Actor and the Directors for making us this excellent show.
This Friday, I went to see another show in the Black Box Theater. It was the third time and the last time I went to see the show in the Black Box in this school year. Compare to my other two experience, this show is my favorite one. The name of the Show is called "Comedy Tonight". As we can see from the name of show, the point of the show is funny and interesting. I liked comedy the best and that's why I enjoyed the show a lot during Friday night. I can say that it was the most popular show in this year, because there were full of audience in the Black Box. When I came to the Theater, there were already full of crowds and there was only a few seats left. As there were full of people inside of the theater, it was very hot inside. However, since the show was started, our attentions were taken away from the stuffiness. I want to say that, every show was interesting and the actor did a really great job putting themselves into the role. Among all this amazing show, one them wasthe most memorable. The first one is form Act one, which told a story about William An's unusual. I still remembered how his wife took his baby car so he had to ride a scooter to work. On the way, he was hitting by a dead bird and made him feel hungry and go to MacDonald to buy breakfast. He can't use his credit card and he had no cash. So he went to the bank. Then the best scene happened. The bank gave him monopoly money and kept telling him that's the real money. At last, poor and unlucky William An(I forget the name of the character he is acting) was being late for work, and his boss was angry about his magical experience so he was fired. There were also some other interesting show such as the morning meeting one and the latte boy one. All in all, if you came to see the show, I believed you enjoyed it a lot. If you did not came to see the show, that may be a regret for you. Anyway, I would like to thank all the Actor and the Directors for making us this excellent show.
2016年5月20日星期五
Poem analysis
I am Sorry
“Sometimes, I wonder what my world will be like, if I didn’t have someone like you in my life.”(Rebecca) Love is the most common emotion that people have. People always have one person which he likes and falls in love with. However, love is painful, and people always make mistakes. Even couples would have argument with each others. Sometimes it’s a big deal and people hurts each other even it is the person he loved. The poem “I am Sorry” is written by Rebecca H. In the poem, she talks about the person she liked and she wants to spend the rest of her life with. But it seems like she made some mistakes in the past which cause some problems in their love. So she wrote this poem to express apologize to the person she loved and expressing her feeling which she wanted to fall in love with him forever.
The poem is very simple, it has only 12 lines with 6 stanzas. It does not include any vocabulary so it looked easy for me to understand and remember. It has a rhyme scheme which is AA BB BB CC DD EE. And it is very helpful while I was remember it. In the poem, each two stanzas have a connection between them. The first stanza: “Sometimes I wonder what my world will be like, If i didn’t have someone like you in my life.” The speaker is thinking if she does not have the man she loved in her life, what her life will be like. Then she found out that she can’t live with out him. So in the second stanza, she wrote that she came back to reality only to see, that I wouldn’t live myself without you and me. The third and fourth stanza is like the transition in this poem which showed that she wanted to stay with him and fall in love with him for the rest of her life. That lead to the point of the poem which is apologize. She knew all the mistakes that she had made and “all the hell she had been putting him through. She felt sorry and she apologized:” I am so sorry, and I can’t say that enough.” She hoped that this will be the last time they had a argument. She still loved him and she will love him forever. She express the feeling of sorry and what she will do in the future to getting back with the man she loved at the end of the poem and that’s the main point of this poem which is to recover her relationship with her boyfriend.
I chose this poem because I also have kind of similar experience as the speaker. I have a girlfriend, and we love each other. However, we have arguments almost everyday. And every time I apologize and promise that it will never happen again in order to solve the problem. The poem makes me think of my own experience with her and I want send this poem to her as the poem has said: I felt sorry about all the mistakes I made to make you feel unhappy. I loved you completely and I hope you can be with me forever. Although, at first I felt really nervous about presenting it to my class, because I am not good at remembering things very much. However, in fact the rhyme scheme helped me a lot, and while I was presenting it, I looked at my girlfriend, feeling like I am talking to her. So at last, it ends up not bad.
2016年5月18日星期三
2016年5月10日星期二
I am sorry
I'm Sorry
Published on July 31, 2015
Sometimes I wonder what my world would be like
If I didn't have someone like you in my life.
I come back to reality only to see
That I wouldn't be myself without you and me.
I am looking forward to the future, hoping you'll be with me,
Growing old together and being happy as can be.
I want to spend the rest of my life making it up to you.
I know all of the hell I've been putting you through.
I am so sorry, and I can't say that enough,
But I hope that's the last time it will ever be rough.
I love you completely, with all of my heart,
I will love you forever, 'til death do us part.
If I didn't have someone like you in my life.
I come back to reality only to see
That I wouldn't be myself without you and me.
I am looking forward to the future, hoping you'll be with me,
Growing old together and being happy as can be.
I want to spend the rest of my life making it up to you.
I know all of the hell I've been putting you through.
I am so sorry, and I can't say that enough,
But I hope that's the last time it will ever be rough.
I love you completely, with all of my heart,
I will love you forever, 'til death do us part.
Source: http://www.familyfriendpoems.com/poem/im-sorry-50 #FamilyFriendPoems
For this poem, I am going to use the music named "In Love" by July as my background music for the recitation. Since my poem was about love and showing a little bit of sadness because it was titled I'm sorry. The music In Love was slow and show a little bit sad, and it was also according to my topic of the poem which was also love. So i think it will fit.
Link:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b_7v-VUa32c
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2016年5月6日星期五
found poem
Dear Dad,
I’m writing to thank you for the money. Each time you get me out of trouble using your wealth I ask myself: if money didn’t exist in this world, how would my father help me? And then I ask myself if it’s the guilt or the love for me that makes you do it. You know what? I don’t want to know. I have been lucky to have a father like you who lets me live my own life and who, when I make a mistake, practically always helps me out. But enough now. I don’t want you to help me any more. You’ve never liked me, I annoy you. When you’re with me you’re always too serious. Maybe it’s because I’m the living proof of a relationship gone wrong and each time you think of me you’re reminded of your shitty marriage to my mother. That’s not my fault, though. I know that for sure. For all the other stuff, I’m not sure. Maybe if I’d tried to be in contact more often, if I’d tried to break down the wall that separates us, maybe it would all have been different. I was thinking that if I had to write a book that tells the story of my life I would call the chapter on you ‘Diary of a Hatred’. Anyhow, I have to learn not to hate you. I have to learn not to hate you when your money arrives and when you call me to find out how it’s all going. I have hated you for too long, with no remorse. I’m sick and tired of it. So thank you once again but from now on even if you feel the urge to help me out, repress it. You are the master of repression and silence.
Your daughter,
Olivia
Poem of Hatred
Thanks for the money
get me out of trouble
as you are wealthy.
If there is no money
How can you help me
Using your love
Or using your care.
Any way, I don't care
Since you never care.
I hate you, I annoy you
For too long, with no remorse.
Thank you once again,
For being the master
Of silence and repression.
I’m writing to thank you for the money. Each time you get me out of trouble using your wealth I ask myself: if money didn’t exist in this world, how would my father help me? And then I ask myself if it’s the guilt or the love for me that makes you do it. You know what? I don’t want to know. I have been lucky to have a father like you who lets me live my own life and who, when I make a mistake, practically always helps me out. But enough now. I don’t want you to help me any more. You’ve never liked me, I annoy you. When you’re with me you’re always too serious. Maybe it’s because I’m the living proof of a relationship gone wrong and each time you think of me you’re reminded of your shitty marriage to my mother. That’s not my fault, though. I know that for sure. For all the other stuff, I’m not sure. Maybe if I’d tried to be in contact more often, if I’d tried to break down the wall that separates us, maybe it would all have been different. I was thinking that if I had to write a book that tells the story of my life I would call the chapter on you ‘Diary of a Hatred’. Anyhow, I have to learn not to hate you. I have to learn not to hate you when your money arrives and when you call me to find out how it’s all going. I have hated you for too long, with no remorse. I’m sick and tired of it. So thank you once again but from now on even if you feel the urge to help me out, repress it. You are the master of repression and silence.
Your daughter,
Olivia
Poem of Hatred
Thanks for the money
get me out of trouble
as you are wealthy.
If there is no money
How can you help me
Using your love
Or using your care.
Any way, I don't care
Since you never care.
I hate you, I annoy you
For too long, with no remorse.
Thank you once again,
For being the master
Of silence and repression.
2016年5月5日星期四
Found poem
Dorms at Cheshire Academy are more than just a place to sleep and study. These residential homes are also a place to unwind, study, talk to friends, listen to music, play games and find time to be alone. Living together on campus helps students and faculty to bond and forge lifelong connections. Friendships built here continue long after graduation.
Cheshire Academy Dorm
A place to live
A place to study
It's a like a home
Your another home.
Hang out in these rooms
With friends, with music
Sometimes with some foods
Bed, table, chest are the basic
Have a rest
Do some works
Have some fun
And go to bed
Cheshire Academy Dorm
A place to live
A place to study
It's a like a home
Your another home.
Hang out in these rooms
With friends, with music
Sometimes with some foods
Bed, table, chest are the basic
Have a rest
Do some works
Have some fun
And go to bed
2016年4月28日星期四
Another poem
The Life Of A Cupcake
Published on May 5, 2014
They put me in the oven to bake.
Me a deprived and miserable cake.
Feeling the heat I started to bubble.
Watching the others I knew I was in trouble
They opened the door and I started my life.
Frosting me with a silver knife.
Decorating me with candy jewels.
The rest of my batch looked like fools.
Lifting me up, she took off my wrapper.
Feeling the breeze, I wanted to slap her.
Opening her mouth with shiny teeth inside.
This was the day this cupcake had died.
Me a deprived and miserable cake.
Feeling the heat I started to bubble.
Watching the others I knew I was in trouble
They opened the door and I started my life.
Frosting me with a silver knife.
Decorating me with candy jewels.
The rest of my batch looked like fools.
Lifting me up, she took off my wrapper.
Feeling the breeze, I wanted to slap her.
Opening her mouth with shiny teeth inside.
This was the day this cupcake had died.
This poem is about a cup cake's life, how this cupcake was born and how he died. As a poem, it used a rhyme of AABB format in each section. Such as paragraph one bake and cake, bubble and trouble. This rhyme makes the poem sound more flexible and more funny. The character was a cupcake which was put into the oven to bake. The author used bubble to describe the condition of the cupcake inside of the oven. Then he used "I was in trouble" to finished the sentence which is interesting and funny. I like this poem not only because it is easy to understand, but also because the description words in the poem. Beside the end rhyme in each sentence, there is also rhyme in the beginning of the sentence for example "Feeling the heat I started to bubble. Watching the others I knew I was in trouble", those two sentence all used an "ing" rhyme at the beginning of the sentence. My favorite part of this poem is that"Lifting me up, she took off my wrapper. Feeling the breeze, I wanted to slap her. Opening her mouth with shiny teeth inside. This was the day this cupcake had died." Those sentence are very interesting which introduced the condition while the cupcake was going to be eat. "Feeling the breeze" makes the cupcake like a real living things, "I wanted to slap her." makes the cupcake have its own thoughts. Those sentence makes me imagine the scene which the cupcake was going to be eaten and facing a huge mouth with shiny teeth.
2016年4月27日星期三
Poem
Utopian
Alicia Ostriker, 1937
My neighbor’s daughter has created a city
you cannot see
on an island to which you cannot swim
ruled by a noble princess and her athletic consort
all the buildings are glass so that lies are impossible
beneath the city they have buried certain words
which can never be spoken again
chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots
when it rains you hear chimes
rabbits race through its suburbs
the name of the city is one you can almost pronounce
This poem is about a girl's imaginary city.
I choose this poem because it sound beautiful
and make me think of the world which is introduced in the poem
I liked it especially that chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots
Which showed that the little girl don't want their parents to be divorced
Rewrite:
My neighbor’s daughter has created a city you cannot see, on an island to which you cannot swim, ruled by a noble princess and her athletic consort. All the buildings are glass so that lies are impossible. Beneath the city they have buried certain words, which can never be spoken again, chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots. When it rains you hear chimes; rabbits race through its suburbs. The name of the city is one you can almost pronounce.
Alicia Ostriker, 1937
My neighbor’s daughter has created a city
you cannot see
on an island to which you cannot swim
ruled by a noble princess and her athletic consort
all the buildings are glass so that lies are impossible
beneath the city they have buried certain words
which can never be spoken again
chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots
when it rains you hear chimes
rabbits race through its suburbs
the name of the city is one you can almost pronounce
This poem is about a girl's imaginary city.
I choose this poem because it sound beautiful
and make me think of the world which is introduced in the poem
I liked it especially that chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots
Which showed that the little girl don't want their parents to be divorced
Rewrite:
My neighbor’s daughter has created a city you cannot see, on an island to which you cannot swim, ruled by a noble princess and her athletic consort. All the buildings are glass so that lies are impossible. Beneath the city they have buried certain words, which can never be spoken again, chiefly the word divorce which is eaten by maggots. When it rains you hear chimes; rabbits race through its suburbs. The name of the city is one you can almost pronounce.
2016年4月25日星期一
Refection of the project
Jerry Wu
Ms. Guarino
English II
April.25.2016
Reflection of the project
For our creative project, we chose to make a board game because at that time, we thought it sounded more interesting. During the time working on it, we met the biggest problem: how can a board game related to the story we read? At first, we researched different kinds of board game, and finally we found out Saboteur which is a card game based on the mine. Then, we spent a long time trying to understand the rule. After we knew the rule, our project is finally started.
We bought the card from the shops, and trying to create our own cards by drawing them on the note card. We divided the work by Leo and Minh draw the cards and I cut the card from the note card into a board game card size. However, this did not work after we saw Minh’s terrible drawing, so we switch the work. During the time making the card, we met another problem: Why the board game we bought looked so strange and lacked a lot of cards. Soon we realized the one we bought is Saboteur 2 and we need a copy of Saboteur to play this expansion. After all, we decided to create the Saboteur game by ourselves.
After all this “lovely” hand drawing, we turned back to think our biggest problem:How to make the game related to the story. This problem perplex us for long time until finally Minh came up an idea. The point is that, we changed the winning rules from People found the gold win into people found the gold win. As the story mentioned, people lived on the lightning Ridge all had an opal dream, they went down to the mine everyday and trying to find the opal. Same as the Williamson family, the father Rex Williams also loved opals. He used to enjoyed his life about finding those valuable stones until he got into trouble while he was searching her daughter Kellyanne’s imaginary friends Pobby and Dingan. He was misunderstood by others on the town, as they thought he was ratting Old-Sid’s mine. As soon as Kellyanne became sick because of the lost of Pobby and Dingan, the Williamson family got to save Kellyanne instead of finding Opals. So we changed the game by adding Pobby and Dingan as goals card and Kellyanne as a special character into our game. Normally, there is normal miner and bad miner in this game. The normal miner’s goal is to find the opal, and the bad miner need to disturb them and have the opal at the end. We made those two types of character as people lived on the Ridge and Old Sid. Beside those. We had make the Williamson family and Kellyanne as the special character. The Williamson family was like the normal miner, if they found the opal they wins. However, Kellyanne was very different, her goal is to find Pobby and Dingan instead of finding the opals. If the member of the Williamson family helped Kellyanne find Pobby and Dingan both of them may win. The point of this game is teamwork and player’s decision I think. The Williamson family can either choose to find the opal to win or help Kellyanne to find Pobby and Dingan. The good miner helped each other to create a route and the bad miner worked together to disturb others. Also you can choose to disturb others if you want to win by yourself at the end. I think this game is base on player’s decision a lot, and how the game will be end depends on the player’s decision. They may learned that teamwork is important and they may probably realized help others is important too, just like in the book, Ashmol made others to find Pobby and Dingan in order to save Kellyanne.
The hardest part of the game is making the connection between the game and the book and see if the connection works in the game or not. None of us plays this game Saboteur before, we even don’t hear it before. We learn how to play and make it into our games and we teach others to play. The final product was finished, but I think it can be better if we spent more time on making the card and trying to make more connections. It’s not because the time was not enough, but we were being lazy and did not spent a lot of time working with each other after schools. Otherwise the project will be perfect. Anyway, from this project we learned design a board game is not very easy, it takes a lot of times to do all this steps:make the rules, create the cards, and see if the rules work in the game, is there any problems(bugs in the game)? I think now I understand the story better since I was keep thinking about how to connect the story with the game and what we can learn from it. What I learned is that, your decision will make the game(the story) ends in a different ways. It is very important to think before make a decision.
2016年4月18日星期一
Project progress
At last Thursday, our group has already finished making half of the cards that we are going to use in this board game. The rest of them we will finish drawing it as Minh had already cut them from the notecard paper. During the weekend, Minh came up the idea that we hide Pobby and Dingan with the opal as the goal. The people who get Kellyanne, who knew where Pobby and Dingan located is going to lead other player to find Pobby and Dingan. If Pobby and Dingan was found, then Kellyanne win the game and get the opal. So instead of only three goal card, there is probably four which one of them was Pobby and Dingan. So that our game can be related to the book, which reminds the player the most important things for Kellyanne is those two imaginary friends she believed. That is our idea about the game. For the rest o times we had, we will finish up drawing all the card we need, and practice playing to see if the game work at all.
2016年4月10日星期日
Proposal for creative project
Introduction:
In order to make a creative project for Pobby and Dingan, our group(Leo, Minh and) choose to make a board game, because board games are fun and all of my classmates can join to play it. Of course the board game is related to the story Pobby and Dingan, and it's about people live on the Lightning Ridge going down to the mine to find opals. There are good character such as Ashmol, Kellyanne, and their father. Their goal is to trying to find as much opal as they could by using their route cards to moving down the mine. If there is good character, there must be some bad character also such as Old Sid. The bad guy's goal is trying to disturb other character to find opals so that they could get all the opals at last.
The game is base on the game Saboteur and it is a card game.
After playing the game, we can have a better understanding of how teamwork is important in this game and refer to that how the Williamson family is going to against the people who pick on them.
After playing the game, we can have a better understanding of how teamwork is important in this game and refer to that how the Williamson family is going to against the people who pick on them.
Rule:
Player play as miner who goes down to the mine and looks for the opal card. Some are just normal miner and some are bad miner who is trying to disturb others. If the miner uses their route card to make an tunnel to the final place which may have the treasure, they could find the opal and the intruder would get nothing. If the miner do not find anything, then the intruder get the opal. When 3 round of the game is finished, the player who had the most opal will win.
Picture of the game should be look like:
Each players have cards on their hands(the amount of cards depends on the amount of player there are in the game). During each turn, each player must use either a route card or an action card into one player or pass the turn.
Route card: this type of card need to be put beside the start card. Each of the card need to be put in the order of the route depends on the pattern it has.
Action card: with this type of card, player can disturb each others or help each others.
Our plans:
Leo is going to design the special character and their abilities in this game which is related to the book Pobby and Dingan.
Me and Minh is going to make the card by using the note card and trying.
Of course we are going to help each other since teamwork is very important.
And we will provide a nicely done board game to our glass when we finished.
2016年4月8日星期五
Opal Dream
"The secret of an opal's color lies not in its substance but in its absences."
———Australian Geographic, 1998
"Opal is one kind of jewelry which is different from diamond and pearl. It's price is not base on how big it is, but depends on the color it has.“ I knew that from my mom while I was in Australia this spring break. People likes opal as it was beautiful and expensive. The rarer color it has, the higher value it has. After reading the book "Pobby and Dingan”, I realized that opal also has a special meaning to them.
In the book, the Williamson were living in the Lighting Ridge which they could find opals. They believed that when they find precious opal they can be wealthy. Actually it was hard to find opal which is precious. Finding opal is a hard works which needs time, patience, and hard working. Ashmol's father Rex Williamson was crazy finding opals, so he brought his family to this poor Ridge in order to reach his dream. Although he hadn't found anything yet, he never gave up because it was his dream. The power of opal(dream) made him continue working even he was called "ratter" by other people in the Ridge. He knew that the value of the opal can make his family's life better, and finding a valuable opal is his belief . This explains that the secret of an opal's color lies not in its substance but in its absences. The secret of an opal is not how much money people can get from its color. It is about how people are going to use the value of the opal and the dream people have in the opal which refers to that the absence(meaning of the opal) is more important than the substance(opal itself).
The people in the Ridge believed in something which is hard to see, or kept looking for something which is totally hard to find. For example, Ashmol felt happy living in the Ridge, he said that "because here there's always opal waiting to be found, and there's always something to dream about"(Pobby and Dingan). From that, we can see that Ashmol did not mind about the "substance"very much as his living condition wasn't very well. He has dream which is finding opal there which explained the reason why he was attracted to this place. He wanted to make his family better if he can find a opal. That's why he used the opal he found to pay for the funeral of Pobby and Dingan because he thought it may get Kellyanne better from illness. He viewed his family more important than the money he can the get from the opal. Instead of being wealthy by using the opal, Ashmol used it to make his family member better. That's how Ashmol thought the absences is more important than the substance itself.
Those dreams insides of the opal are invisible and important to all the characters in the book. That's why the secret of an opal's color lies not in its substance but in its absences.
———Australian Geographic, 1998
"Opal is one kind of jewelry which is different from diamond and pearl. It's price is not base on how big it is, but depends on the color it has.“ I knew that from my mom while I was in Australia this spring break. People likes opal as it was beautiful and expensive. The rarer color it has, the higher value it has. After reading the book "Pobby and Dingan”, I realized that opal also has a special meaning to them.
In the book, the Williamson were living in the Lighting Ridge which they could find opals. They believed that when they find precious opal they can be wealthy. Actually it was hard to find opal which is precious. Finding opal is a hard works which needs time, patience, and hard working. Ashmol's father Rex Williamson was crazy finding opals, so he brought his family to this poor Ridge in order to reach his dream. Although he hadn't found anything yet, he never gave up because it was his dream. The power of opal(dream) made him continue working even he was called "ratter" by other people in the Ridge. He knew that the value of the opal can make his family's life better, and finding a valuable opal is his belief . This explains that the secret of an opal's color lies not in its substance but in its absences. The secret of an opal is not how much money people can get from its color. It is about how people are going to use the value of the opal and the dream people have in the opal which refers to that the absence(meaning of the opal) is more important than the substance(opal itself).
The people in the Ridge believed in something which is hard to see, or kept looking for something which is totally hard to find. For example, Ashmol felt happy living in the Ridge, he said that "because here there's always opal waiting to be found, and there's always something to dream about"(Pobby and Dingan). From that, we can see that Ashmol did not mind about the "substance"very much as his living condition wasn't very well. He has dream which is finding opal there which explained the reason why he was attracted to this place. He wanted to make his family better if he can find a opal. That's why he used the opal he found to pay for the funeral of Pobby and Dingan because he thought it may get Kellyanne better from illness. He viewed his family more important than the money he can the get from the opal. Instead of being wealthy by using the opal, Ashmol used it to make his family member better. That's how Ashmol thought the absences is more important than the substance itself.
Those dreams insides of the opal are invisible and important to all the characters in the book. That's why the secret of an opal's color lies not in its substance but in its absences.
2016年3月31日星期四
Quiz
2. What connection does Asmol make between the land covered with seawater and Pobby and Dingan? Why is that important to the story?
While Ashmol is searching Pobby and Dingan, he remembered that Dad has told him for each star in the sky there is an opal. Lightning Ridge where he lives was once covered by sea water and how kind of sea creature had been found. He realized that if all these amazing thing was true, Pobby and Dingan maybe true. He started to believe that Pobby and Dingan did existed. This is important in the story which explain Pobby and Dingan are true or not and this lead up to Ashmol find "something" at the end. That shows Ashmol is trying his best to look for Pobby and Dingan, and he is not just a person who did not believe anything.
5. In the end of the story, Ashmol talks about what it’s like to “believe in something which is hard to see. Or to keep looking for something that’s totally hard to find.” In the novel, both dream and imagination are important to the characters. In particular, Ashmol's mom Annie also held a dream/imagination. She was once looking at a photograph which was took in England. In the photo, there is her ex-boyfriend and herself when she was young. This shows that Mom misses her life in England, and it seems like she doesn't like the life in the ridge very much. Her dream maybe going back to England and have the same life as she had in the past. Not staying in the Ridge, waiting for his husband find something precious and become wealthy. However, she need to take care of her children and stay with the family. This photo is kind of her dream she had in the novel.
Every one has their unseen dream, Kellyanne's dream is staying with her imaginary friends Pobby and Dingan. Which was very important to her that after Pobby and Dingan was missing, Kellyanne soon became very sick. This shows that how the belief of Pobby and Dingan is important to Kellyanne. The unseen dream in this novel is like the hope for the characters to live.
While Ashmol is searching Pobby and Dingan, he remembered that Dad has told him for each star in the sky there is an opal. Lightning Ridge where he lives was once covered by sea water and how kind of sea creature had been found. He realized that if all these amazing thing was true, Pobby and Dingan maybe true. He started to believe that Pobby and Dingan did existed. This is important in the story which explain Pobby and Dingan are true or not and this lead up to Ashmol find "something" at the end. That shows Ashmol is trying his best to look for Pobby and Dingan, and he is not just a person who did not believe anything.
5. In the end of the story, Ashmol talks about what it’s like to “believe in something which is hard to see. Or to keep looking for something that’s totally hard to find.” In the novel, both dream and imagination are important to the characters. In particular, Ashmol's mom Annie also held a dream/imagination. She was once looking at a photograph which was took in England. In the photo, there is her ex-boyfriend and herself when she was young. This shows that Mom misses her life in England, and it seems like she doesn't like the life in the ridge very much. Her dream maybe going back to England and have the same life as she had in the past. Not staying in the Ridge, waiting for his husband find something precious and become wealthy. However, she need to take care of her children and stay with the family. This photo is kind of her dream she had in the novel.
Every one has their unseen dream, Kellyanne's dream is staying with her imaginary friends Pobby and Dingan. Which was very important to her that after Pobby and Dingan was missing, Kellyanne soon became very sick. This shows that how the belief of Pobby and Dingan is important to Kellyanne. The unseen dream in this novel is like the hope for the characters to live.
2016年3月30日星期三
Chapter 8-12
1. Why do you think that Ashmol decides to search for Pobby and Dingan for real instead of just pretending
Because Kellyanne is getting really sick, he thinks that if he searched for them more seriously, she would feel better. He knew that if he was just pretending to search them, Kellyanne won't believed him. He did not want Kellyanne to think he was still that Ashmol who didn't believe anything. So at the end, he tried he best to search for them and he believed what Kellyanne said she felt that they were missing under the mine.
Because Kellyanne is getting really sick, he thinks that if he searched for them more seriously, she would feel better. He knew that if he was just pretending to search them, Kellyanne won't believed him. He did not want Kellyanne to think he was still that Ashmol who didn't believe anything. So at the end, he tried he best to search for them and he believed what Kellyanne said she felt that they were missing under the mine.
Spring story
Spring break is the most wonderful thing during March, but unfortunately, I need to spent nearly 50 hours on the plane. I went back to China and then I soon flew to Australia because my mom was there. Spring break is 14 days at all, two days I spent on the plane, and ten days in Australia. Of course, I didn't want to go. Instead of going to Australia and being controlled by my mother, I prefer to stay in China, having relax, meeting my friends.
I have a brother which is 13 now. Unlike me, he went to Australia to study abroad. Because he is too young to live on his own, my mom is going with him. The place called home is the place where your mother is. That was the reason why I need to go to Australia. It is the second time I visit there. The last time was 4 years ago, and it wasn't a good memory for me. Our family travelled to Australia, and we met typhoon and the highest temperature. Besides that, I was sick for most of the time during the trip. That was why I hated Australia.
After a long time "dying" on the plane, I finally arrived Sydney and it was raining outside. Mom told me it hasn't been raining since 2 month ago. Looks like this place doesn't welcome me very much. The first day in Australia was very tired. I could not get to sleep because of the jet lag. I waked up in the morning, and I felt I am tired already. I went to the market with my mom, and I felt like I even don't have any strength to carry the bags. I lied on the bed for the rest of the day, I was afraid of if I would get sick again. Luckily, it was just my worry. I got better in the next day, mom said that I was just too tired because of the travel and jet lag. After several days living in that place I disliked, I felt like this place wasn't that bad as I thought. Sydney is a beautiful city which surrounded by the ocean. It is a city which means it is like Shanghai and Newyork and it is very convenient. It has both nice environment and crowded people. I felt like it was a combination of China and American. Mom said that was because Australia has people from different place moving there to live. It was a place with different culture.
During these 10 days in Australia, I kind of changed my mind of Australia was a bad place. After living there for several days, I found out why my mom liked this place that much. It has a better education which is good for my brother, and she likes the weather there. She enjoyed the view of the ocean and the bay, and so did I. However, I still feel like I prefer to live in China, because I missed my friends and my own bedroom. Anyway, this experience makes me think Australia is a good place.
I have a brother which is 13 now. Unlike me, he went to Australia to study abroad. Because he is too young to live on his own, my mom is going with him. The place called home is the place where your mother is. That was the reason why I need to go to Australia. It is the second time I visit there. The last time was 4 years ago, and it wasn't a good memory for me. Our family travelled to Australia, and we met typhoon and the highest temperature. Besides that, I was sick for most of the time during the trip. That was why I hated Australia.
After a long time "dying" on the plane, I finally arrived Sydney and it was raining outside. Mom told me it hasn't been raining since 2 month ago. Looks like this place doesn't welcome me very much. The first day in Australia was very tired. I could not get to sleep because of the jet lag. I waked up in the morning, and I felt I am tired already. I went to the market with my mom, and I felt like I even don't have any strength to carry the bags. I lied on the bed for the rest of the day, I was afraid of if I would get sick again. Luckily, it was just my worry. I got better in the next day, mom said that I was just too tired because of the travel and jet lag. After several days living in that place I disliked, I felt like this place wasn't that bad as I thought. Sydney is a beautiful city which surrounded by the ocean. It is a city which means it is like Shanghai and Newyork and it is very convenient. It has both nice environment and crowded people. I felt like it was a combination of China and American. Mom said that was because Australia has people from different place moving there to live. It was a place with different culture.
During these 10 days in Australia, I kind of changed my mind of Australia was a bad place. After living there for several days, I found out why my mom liked this place that much. It has a better education which is good for my brother, and she likes the weather there. She enjoyed the view of the ocean and the bay, and so did I. However, I still feel like I prefer to live in China, because I missed my friends and my own bedroom. Anyway, this experience makes me think Australia is a good place.
2016年3月10日星期四
Pobby and Dingan
Pobby and Dingan are imaginary friends of Kellyanne. They are Kellyanne's best friends and they always play with each other. They came from Kellyanne's mind, and only Kellyanne herself can see them. Except Kellyanne, nobody knows what they actually look like. In the novel, Kellyanne said that"They didn't look like anything in particular, but Dingan had a lovely opal in her bellybutton, only you had to be certain kind of person to see it. And Pobby had a limp in his right leg"(chapter 5). That was the only description that Kellyanne gave to Ashmol when Ashmol was trying to find them. Besides that "Pobby and Dingan don't sleep and they don't shoot. They are pacifists"(chapter 7). It seems like Pobby and Dingan don't have the same hobby as human being. They did not eat meals, but instead they like lollipops.
In my opinion, I don't believe that Pobby and Dingan really exist. They are just imaginary friends for Kellyanne. They are not real and they just exist in people's mind. In my opinion, I think both of them is very lively character as they all like playing on the swing and playing shooting games. They were also very naughty, as they even talk with Kellyanne while she is at school. Furthermore, Dingan must have a pretty appearance as she won the third prize in the Opal Princess Competition. Both Pobby and Dingan are only visible to Kellyanne, and they are lively while the time they spend with Kellyanne. They might be shy to strange people, as they could probably hiding themselves and nobody could see them. That's why although Ashmol organized a Tow search, they were still lost and nobody could find them. Beside that, they might not like Ashmol very much, as Ashmol always hit them and treat them very bad.
All in all, that is all my opinion about Pobby and Dingan. They maybe do not like me, as I don't believe they exist, and I thought they are trouble maker. Because of them, Dad was called ratter, and the fence was burned. I could not think more about what they look like, perhaps they make me blank in my mind as they do not like me.
In my opinion, I don't believe that Pobby and Dingan really exist. They are just imaginary friends for Kellyanne. They are not real and they just exist in people's mind. In my opinion, I think both of them is very lively character as they all like playing on the swing and playing shooting games. They were also very naughty, as they even talk with Kellyanne while she is at school. Furthermore, Dingan must have a pretty appearance as she won the third prize in the Opal Princess Competition. Both Pobby and Dingan are only visible to Kellyanne, and they are lively while the time they spend with Kellyanne. They might be shy to strange people, as they could probably hiding themselves and nobody could see them. That's why although Ashmol organized a Tow search, they were still lost and nobody could find them. Beside that, they might not like Ashmol very much, as Ashmol always hit them and treat them very bad.
All in all, that is all my opinion about Pobby and Dingan. They maybe do not like me, as I don't believe they exist, and I thought they are trouble maker. Because of them, Dad was called ratter, and the fence was burned. I could not think more about what they look like, perhaps they make me blank in my mind as they do not like me.
2016年3月3日星期四
Vocabulary
claim: place which has mine
Mum asked one night when she’d got back from her job on the checkout at Khan’s and me and Dad were relaxing after a hard afternoon’s work out at the claim.
wobbling: shaking
The noise of a car drove into our ears and a four-wheel-drive police jeep came wobbling down the creamy red track that leads to our claim.
startled: excited by a sudden suprise.
My dad turned around, startled. He was totally off his guard.
figment: something unreal and come from imagine.
Kellyanne glared at me through tears the way she did the time I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.
rummaged: search
He rummaged through piles of rocks.
ute: a member of an American Indian people of the Utah and W Colorado
Kellyanne glared at me through tears the way she did the time I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.
crackpot: idiot strange people
Lightning Ridge was full of flaming crackpots as far as I could see.
Mello Yello: kind of drink which is orange flavor
I said, hiding my anger in a swig from my can of Mello Yello.
mates: friends, people that stay together with a good relationship
“I still say Kellyanne could do with some real-live mates,”
opal: a translucent mineral consisting of hydrated silica of variable color; some varieties are used as gemstones
My dad would come back from the opal mines covered in dust
fairdinkum: Fair truth
“Fairdinkum?”
imaginary: something which comes from people's mind, unreal
but I wasn’t crazy enough to talk to imaginary friends
grub: worms
She said they were quieter and better behaved than me and deserved the grub.
fossilized: transfer in to a fossil
There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it.
mammoth: an extinct animal
There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it.
Mum asked one night when she’d got back from her job on the checkout at Khan’s and me and Dad were relaxing after a hard afternoon’s work out at the claim.
wobbling: shaking
The noise of a car drove into our ears and a four-wheel-drive police jeep came wobbling down the creamy red track that leads to our claim.
startled: excited by a sudden suprise.
My dad turned around, startled. He was totally off his guard.
figment: something unreal and come from imagine.
Kellyanne glared at me through tears the way she did the time I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.
rummaged: search
He rummaged through piles of rocks.
ute: a member of an American Indian people of the Utah and W Colorado
Kellyanne glared at me through tears the way she did the time I slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time I walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings.
crackpot: idiot strange people
Lightning Ridge was full of flaming crackpots as far as I could see.
Mello Yello: kind of drink which is orange flavor
I said, hiding my anger in a swig from my can of Mello Yello.
mates: friends, people that stay together with a good relationship
“I still say Kellyanne could do with some real-live mates,”
opal: a translucent mineral consisting of hydrated silica of variable color; some varieties are used as gemstones
My dad would come back from the opal mines covered in dust
fairdinkum: Fair truth
“Fairdinkum?”
imaginary: something which comes from people's mind, unreal
but I wasn’t crazy enough to talk to imaginary friends
grub: worms
She said they were quieter and better behaved than me and deserved the grub.
fossilized: transfer in to a fossil
There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it.
mammoth: an extinct animal
There’s rumours going that Lucky Jes has taken out a million-dollar stone and a fossilized mammoth tooth with sun-flash in it.
In class writing
In the first two chapters of the book Pobby and Dingan, the author described a little girl with two imaginary friends and the attitude of people around her. 8 years old little girl Kellyanne had two invisible friends: Pobby and Dingan. She is very special that she liked to play with her imaginary friends rather than getting together with other kids. Pobby and Dingan were very special and important to her. Although, there are some people who had imaginary friend when they were young. The reason which caused that is probably because they were lonely and they want friends. Children are always imaginative so that it is not hard to understand some little kids have friends that do not exist. However, I did not believe Pobby and Dingan are real. As I said they were imaginary friends for Kellyanne, and they were created by Kellyanne. In chapter one, "[Ashmol] slammed the door of the ute in Dingan’s face or the time [he] walked over to where Pobby was supposed to be sitting and punched the air and kicked the air in the head to show Kellyanne that Pobby was a figment of her imaginings"(Rice 53). This showed that those two friends were unreal which there is nothing happens even they got hit or hurt. Besides that, while Pobby and Dingan were lost, Kellyanne tried to find them and kept shouting for a long time but nobody replied. They couldn't be found as they haven't existed yet. All in all, I don't believe they are real even the story itself is a fiction which something amazing could happen. From a scientific point of view, I thought Pobby and Dingan are unreal.
2016年3月2日星期三
What did I improve?
After a long time revising my essay, I think now I know how to write a literature response. In a literature response, a thesis is very important which should be introduced in the introduction, and it is usually led up by a hook. My introduction used to be only two sentences: my thesis and a little detail about the book and the movie. Now it starts with a question as a hook, and my answer to the question which lead up my thesis.
Besides that, my body paragraph improved a lot too, it used to be too much details and summary as I wanted it to be specific. However, as I kept adding details, I felt confused and forgot to do analysis for my main point. So I deleted some details which is not related to my topic, and instead summarizing in my own words, I used a quote and made several analysis on it. And all my quotes and analysis is related on my thesis and according to the topic sentence.
Besides that, my body paragraph improved a lot too, it used to be too much details and summary as I wanted it to be specific. However, as I kept adding details, I felt confused and forgot to do analysis for my main point. So I deleted some details which is not related to my topic, and instead summarizing in my own words, I used a quote and made several analysis on it. And all my quotes and analysis is related on my thesis and according to the topic sentence.
2016年2月29日星期一
My favorite character
After watching the musical, I felt like I like both the character Ti Moune and the actor best. In the play, Ti Moune showed how she loved Daniel and how strong she wanted be together with him. And the actor showed me that feeling by her action and emotion. The actor made me feel like she really fell in love with that boy and she was not just acting. For example, in the wedding, she lied on the ground and showed her hand to Daniel. From her voice and emotion, I could imagine that how sad she was to see the boy she loved marrying another woman. Her voice was shaking which made me feel that she was almost cry because of the sadness. As an actor, she did a great job, and as Ti Moune, she showed the feeling which made me understand the story better.
2016年2月28日星期日
Once on this Island
This Friday night, I went to see the musical"Once on this island" which was produced by the Winter Musical. At first, I did not want to go as I heard it was a musical. I don't like musical because most the time I did not understand what it is talking about. When I saw the part of it during the morning meeting, I felt no idea about what it was about. It was just people standing together and singing together. At that time, I thought the musical must be very boring. However, after I went watching the musical, my mind was changed.
The musical talked about an island which was separated by the peasant and the rich. Our main character Ti Moune who was a peasant fell in love with Daniel who was born in the rich. She met Daniel in a car accident, and Daniel was dying. Ti Moune prayed for him to the God and finally saved him. After Daniel had been recovered, they fell in love with each other. From that the story seemed to be very romantic. However, it did not end up very well. At the end, although Ti Moune loved Daniel so much, but they can't be together because of the different social level they were. Besides that, Daniel also promised to married another girl when he was young. Finally, Ti Moune died because of the love. The story ended up sadly, as Daniel did not loved Ti Moune as much as she loved him. They can't be together as they were in different social level. This fairy tale reminded me of the feudalism which people were not treated equally. The more wealthy people were, the higher social level they had.
While I was watching this musical, I was surprised that I could understand the story. Although Ms.Guarino had told us some plots about the story, the combination of acting and singing made the meaning of the story clear to me. I felt like I was in the story as my attention was taken away by the music. From the song, I could almost imagine the feeling of the character. When Ti Moune was trying to saving Daniel, the music soon became very serious and sad. This made me realized that, as they were in different society, she should not pray to save him and she'd better let him died. That also explained that why Ti Moune's papa and mama did not agreed Ti Moune to find Dainel at first. I can see that this music with produced with a lot of effort and strive from both the actors and the director. The actor did a great job such as Ti Monue, her voice and her action made me feel that she was really in love and made the story very realistic. This is the first time, I felt that I could understand a musical and enjoyed it. Everyone in the Winter musical had tried their best to provided this good show for us. It was a excellent show and I was really looking forward to the next one.
The musical talked about an island which was separated by the peasant and the rich. Our main character Ti Moune who was a peasant fell in love with Daniel who was born in the rich. She met Daniel in a car accident, and Daniel was dying. Ti Moune prayed for him to the God and finally saved him. After Daniel had been recovered, they fell in love with each other. From that the story seemed to be very romantic. However, it did not end up very well. At the end, although Ti Moune loved Daniel so much, but they can't be together because of the different social level they were. Besides that, Daniel also promised to married another girl when he was young. Finally, Ti Moune died because of the love. The story ended up sadly, as Daniel did not loved Ti Moune as much as she loved him. They can't be together as they were in different social level. This fairy tale reminded me of the feudalism which people were not treated equally. The more wealthy people were, the higher social level they had.
While I was watching this musical, I was surprised that I could understand the story. Although Ms.Guarino had told us some plots about the story, the combination of acting and singing made the meaning of the story clear to me. I felt like I was in the story as my attention was taken away by the music. From the song, I could almost imagine the feeling of the character. When Ti Moune was trying to saving Daniel, the music soon became very serious and sad. This made me realized that, as they were in different society, she should not pray to save him and she'd better let him died. That also explained that why Ti Moune's papa and mama did not agreed Ti Moune to find Dainel at first. I can see that this music with produced with a lot of effort and strive from both the actors and the director. The actor did a great job such as Ti Monue, her voice and her action made me feel that she was really in love and made the story very realistic. This is the first time, I felt that I could understand a musical and enjoyed it. Everyone in the Winter musical had tried their best to provided this good show for us. It was a excellent show and I was really looking forward to the next one.
2016年2月26日星期五
Writing center Visit
This is the second time, I visit the writing center. I went there yesterday, and I got advice from Ms.Swift. Actually, the advice that I got was not the one I expected though. At first, I was hoping that she could give me some opinion on my third body paragraph. As my third body paragraph is just a rough draft which I finished on Tuesday. It is unlike the first two body paragraph which I edited a lot and received several feedback. While I was writing it, I felt running out of words to explain my point, and I felt confusing because I thought I kept repeating the same point.
As I arrived at the writing center, there were already three people working on their assignment there. The result for that is I did not get a lot of help in fact. There is four students who need help from Ms.Swift, but there is only one teacher. Unfortunately, she could not help each of us very carefully and specifically. Overall, she told us how to structure and organized our essay. She mentioned in the introduction, we need to write something in common to lead up to our thesis, and then related to the book and movie which we are writing about. She said it was also the problem in my essay. As I only have two sentence in my introduction: "Both the novel and the film shows that, love has the power to change someone from rebellious and antisocial to caring and open-minded because of the love they felt from others. Love is like the hope, and it always saves and helps people." I used to think my introduction was very clear and specific. However, I was wrong. An Introduction need to have at least three to five sentence, but I only had two. In order to improve, I would better write a leading sentence which is in common idea. Then I could say, the book "Me and You" and the movie "The Last Song" showed that love had the power to change someone from ... to .... Beside that, my thesis "Love is like the hope, it always saves and helps people." could be introduced before that brief summary about the book and the movie. The leading sentence would be expended about my thesis which attracts reader.
All in all, I think my visit to the writing center is helpful, but not as I was looking forward though. Besides this time, I would probably need another time visiting there to revise my body paragraph. Next time, when Ms.Guarino asked us to go to the writing center, I should go earlier in the week. This time, because I haven't finish writing my essay, and I was being lazy, I went there in the last days. To avoid that, I need to make a appointment with Ms.Swift earlier during the week next time, so that I could get more help and make my paper better.
As I arrived at the writing center, there were already three people working on their assignment there. The result for that is I did not get a lot of help in fact. There is four students who need help from Ms.Swift, but there is only one teacher. Unfortunately, she could not help each of us very carefully and specifically. Overall, she told us how to structure and organized our essay. She mentioned in the introduction, we need to write something in common to lead up to our thesis, and then related to the book and movie which we are writing about. She said it was also the problem in my essay. As I only have two sentence in my introduction: "Both the novel and the film shows that, love has the power to change someone from rebellious and antisocial to caring and open-minded because of the love they felt from others. Love is like the hope, and it always saves and helps people." I used to think my introduction was very clear and specific. However, I was wrong. An Introduction need to have at least three to five sentence, but I only had two. In order to improve, I would better write a leading sentence which is in common idea. Then I could say, the book "Me and You" and the movie "The Last Song" showed that love had the power to change someone from ... to .... Beside that, my thesis "Love is like the hope, it always saves and helps people." could be introduced before that brief summary about the book and the movie. The leading sentence would be expended about my thesis which attracts reader.
All in all, I think my visit to the writing center is helpful, but not as I was looking forward though. Besides this time, I would probably need another time visiting there to revise my body paragraph. Next time, when Ms.Guarino asked us to go to the writing center, I should go earlier in the week. This time, because I haven't finish writing my essay, and I was being lazy, I went there in the last days. To avoid that, I need to make a appointment with Ms.Swift earlier during the week next time, so that I could get more help and make my paper better.
2016年2月24日星期三
Love and Hope Reflection
After a long time spending time both in class and at home, my essay is about to done and it is getting better. Now, I have done written about how the character changes from both the book and the movie. I am going to write a comparison between them as they have really similar conditions. As long as we did a lot of paper "workshops" in class, we discussed how we can improve our essay. I learned that, a thesis should be argumentative and analytical. For example, my thesis is that "love is like the hope, it always saves and helps people." This is my argument and my topic of my paragraph. It is argumentative but it's not specific as I did not explain it. So I mentioned how love had change some one from ... to ... in both the novel and the movie which helped to make my thesis clear and specific.
Besides that, my body paragraph used to be full of the summary about the story and the movie. As I read that, I felt boring because I already knew what happen in it. After learning that how to improved the body paragraph, I used quotes instead of summarizing what happened in the story and I explained each of them. I deleted some summary which was not related to my topic, and I added more analysis about how the characters was change, what they used to be before they changed, and what are they after they changed. Analysis is the most difficult part for me. Sometimes, when I was explaining one quotes, I felt like I was kept repeating the same point, and had no idea about how to make it specific sometimes. For example this quote: “[he] felt something [he]’d never felt before, [he] felt alive. And yet [he] knew that beyond the door the world was waiting for [him], and [he] would be able to take others like [he] was one of them”(Ammaniti 143). I spent a long time revising the analysis of this quotes. I explained what did alive mean in this quotes and why Lorenzo never felt that before and why he felt that now. but I think I could explained more but I really have no idea. If I explained more, I felt like I would keep repeating that how Lorenzo was changed from this to this because of Olivia. Analysis is my weakness and I need to spend more time working on it. Also, a topic and ending sentence which shows the point of the paragraph is very important, so that it was clear and well organized. In the topic sentence, I showed that how love have changed people and give them hope such as "In the story “Me and You”, the time staying with Olivia caused Lorenzo to change from being selfish and antisocial to caring". As I learned from Ms.Guarino, something cause something happen could make the topic sentence more stronger, now I am able to write a good topic sentence. The ending sentence is similar and I made it related to my topic Love and Hope.
At last, I think I still need to finish my story first, as I haven't done the comparison paragraph and the conclusion. Then, I need to checked over my body paragraph to make it more analytical.
Besides that, my body paragraph used to be full of the summary about the story and the movie. As I read that, I felt boring because I already knew what happen in it. After learning that how to improved the body paragraph, I used quotes instead of summarizing what happened in the story and I explained each of them. I deleted some summary which was not related to my topic, and I added more analysis about how the characters was change, what they used to be before they changed, and what are they after they changed. Analysis is the most difficult part for me. Sometimes, when I was explaining one quotes, I felt like I was kept repeating the same point, and had no idea about how to make it specific sometimes. For example this quote: “[he] felt something [he]’d never felt before, [he] felt alive. And yet [he] knew that beyond the door the world was waiting for [him], and [he] would be able to take others like [he] was one of them”(Ammaniti 143). I spent a long time revising the analysis of this quotes. I explained what did alive mean in this quotes and why Lorenzo never felt that before and why he felt that now. but I think I could explained more but I really have no idea. If I explained more, I felt like I would keep repeating that how Lorenzo was changed from this to this because of Olivia. Analysis is my weakness and I need to spend more time working on it. Also, a topic and ending sentence which shows the point of the paragraph is very important, so that it was clear and well organized. In the topic sentence, I showed that how love have changed people and give them hope such as "In the story “Me and You”, the time staying with Olivia caused Lorenzo to change from being selfish and antisocial to caring". As I learned from Ms.Guarino, something cause something happen could make the topic sentence more stronger, now I am able to write a good topic sentence. The ending sentence is similar and I made it related to my topic Love and Hope.
At last, I think I still need to finish my story first, as I haven't done the comparison paragraph and the conclusion. Then, I need to checked over my body paragraph to make it more analytical.
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